Writing Effectively at The World Health Organization

Practice: Revise a wordy paragraph

In the paragraph below, please use the highlighting pen to mark mark the phrases that seem wordy to you. If you highlight something by mistake, click the "Start over" button to refresh your page. Check our suggested response to see if you agree. Then revise the paragraph to eliminate the wordiness.

When you’ve completed your revision, click to see ours. Your revision will not be identical, but it should be similarly brief.

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