Analyze Sentence Branching
When does branching in sentences add necessary details, and when does it distract the reader and lead to misunderstandings? Review these four sentences. For each one, do the following:
- Identify the main subject and verb.
- Identify the type of branching that is occurring.
- Determine if the branching is a barrier to understanding. If you feel it is, rewrite the sentence to make the meaning more obvious.
Example 1 Although industrialized countries typically store 15 to 20 percent of their annual demand for gas, and although this is considered to be a good practice and is well understood as such, Ruritania has no reserves stored. |
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Example 2 Pending the appropriate authorizations, and assuming the financial arrangements can be finalized in time, Vivace Worldwide has agreed to sell 20 percent of its holdings to Ringtone Communications by September, 2011. |
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Example 3 So-called right-to-information provisions, by the use of which villagers can (at least in theory) gain access to documents in which official expenditures are detailed, have been enacted in all three provinces to ensure greater participation in government processes. |
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